Tuesday, November 29, 2016

A Mournful Song


Pic @ Truedessa 



















Red robin came to sing one day
in grief, I wished he'd go away

covering my ears so not to hear
he just wanted to bring some cheer

my heart out of tune with the beat
wearily tapping my heavy feet

and there must be something wrong
in wanting to silence a birdsong

Writing a cover Poem at dVerse
inspired by the following:


 A Minor Bird by Robert Frost

I have wished a bird would fly away,
And not sing by my house all day;

Have clapped my hands at him from the door
When it seemed as if I could bear no more.

The fault must partly have been in me.
The bird was not to blame for his key.

And of course there must be something wrong
In wanting to silence any song

26 comments:

  1. a wonderful cover of the original. Love the line: "my heart out of tune with the beat"

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    1. Thank you Bryan for an interesting prompt!

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  2. I love both the original poem and your response Truedessa ~ It is indeed a mournful song but well done ~

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    1. Thanks Grace well I guess some songs can be melancholy

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  3. I love your poem, Truedessa. There are times, when in grief, one cannot bear the joy in birdsong.

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    1. Sherry that is true as the heart is heavy

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  4. I like your take on Robert Frost's poem. Yours is a robin, and not wanting to be cheered from mourning. It goes farther than Frost's. The extension is great!

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  5. Loved your version. Both really nice. Fascinating

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    1. Thanks, it was fun to write with a bit of help from Mr. Frost

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  6. Love your extrapolation, despite finding comfort on dark days in bird song.

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    1. Well, sometimes we need a birdsong to perk us up!

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  7. Enjoyed your words but LOVE the house in your picture.

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    1. That is Robert Frost's stone home in Vermont, it is very lovely and now a museum. His poetry hangs on the walls. I had a wonderful time there.

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  8. Sometimes they can just annoy even as they try and bring joy. Send out a cat, fixes that lol

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    1. Haha I listen to birdsongs everyday, as mine always has her way!

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  9. I think yours is better!
    Don't mind the birds unless it's the crack of dawn on a Saturday.

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    1. Thanks Alex you made me smile.

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  10. I love it! It makes me wonder what has the speaker so down. =)

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    1. Thanks for visiting it does leave a question?

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  11. If it's not 3 AM in the morning I would know that I would be wrong trying to silence songs.

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    1. At 3:00 am you might hear a different kind of song!

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  12. SMiLes.. mY FriEnd
    tHeRe was actually
    a now wHere a bird
    SonG i could not stand..
    a cricket in
    Bedroom
    a Freight
    train over
    ears
    and
    a Street
    Lamp at
    3 AM brighter
    below that staring
    a sun in the eYes of mine..
    so far back
    then
    in
    HeLL wHere
    any contact
    of Nature hurt
    as death as liFe..
    hmm..
    polar
    opposite now
    all SpRinG aLL noW..:)

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    1. Hey, Good to see you again :-)

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  13. Well composed insight. This is good because we relate.

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